Feedback:

1. Clear idea of theme, especially in first scene.
2. Precise drawings
3. Good use of colour

Suggestions: 

• Add a breakfast plate to kitchen scene
• Take a look at the font and labels on Protein Powder Jars to use
• Experiment with sounds such as using Protein Adverts – LA Muscle & Muscle Protein Bulk. Make sure it is fair use and ensure the sound is edited.
• Advert can be used to be background noise for kitchen and drinking scene
• Animate the hunter picking up his rifle
• Silhouette of the hunter in the door way with rifle in his hand then walking off and door shutting
• Hunter could then walk through bushes to get to an elephant but gets stung by a thorn or a bee/wasp then begins to deflate like a balloon
• Hunter could fly away like a deflating balloon landing on the floor and the elephant stepping on it
• Keep theme of it being a mockery of trophy hunters and the male ego trip